Oscillations
Loved the last stanza.. great imagery
Thank you so much βΊοΈπ€
Beautiful description and understanding.
The imagery of dunes and a snake winding reminds me of desolation and being alone with the task of picking up the pieces.
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Plucked bare and thin as a May fly wing - such beautiful imagery here, throughout the poem. π
Thank you so much! βΊοΈβ€οΈ
Clumsy-footed; unbalanced in shifting dunes - I love this line. Also nothing can fog your thoughts like sea mist more than high-dose lithium. Not sure if the image is related but I drew the connection. x
Thank you so much! I wrote the poem about bipolar, so the lithium photo was definitely an intentional clue! The voice (for me) is a child living with a parent who has bipolar & is going through an episode of mania. Itβs probably my most personal poem yet so it was hard to post! I wrote that line in reference to the detachment from reality caused by the bipolar/mania, but I can definitely see that it might resonate with some people in that way too! Thank you so much for your comment π©Ά
I felt like it might be. Thanks for writing it - it's breathtaking. x
Thatβs so kind, thank you π©Ά
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Thank you! I spent way too much time just changing that one line back and forth π π so Iβm glad you liked it! π₯°
Relatable Iβm all about ruthlessly cutting bits out of my private work atm feels great
Haha Iβm glad you understand π
Beautifully written <3
Thank you so much π€
Loved the last stanza.. great imagery
Thank you so much βΊοΈπ€
Beautiful description and understanding.
The imagery of dunes and a snake winding reminds me of desolation and being alone with the task of picking up the pieces.
β‘β‘β‘β‘β‘
Plucked bare and thin as a May fly wing - such beautiful imagery here, throughout the poem. π
Thank you so much! βΊοΈβ€οΈ
Clumsy-footed; unbalanced in shifting dunes - I love this line. Also nothing can fog your thoughts like sea mist more than high-dose lithium. Not sure if the image is related but I drew the connection. x
Thank you so much! I wrote the poem about bipolar, so the lithium photo was definitely an intentional clue! The voice (for me) is a child living with a parent who has bipolar & is going through an episode of mania. Itβs probably my most personal poem yet so it was hard to post! I wrote that line in reference to the detachment from reality caused by the bipolar/mania, but I can definitely see that it might resonate with some people in that way too! Thank you so much for your comment π©Ά
I felt like it might be. Thanks for writing it - it's breathtaking. x
Thatβs so kind, thank you π©Ά
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Thank you! I spent way too much time just changing that one line back and forth π π so Iβm glad you liked it! π₯°
Relatable Iβm all about ruthlessly cutting bits out of my private work atm feels great
Haha Iβm glad you understand π
Beautifully written <3
Thank you so much π€